Application Denied

[Swayde]

http://www.rap-royalty.com/forum/tex...y-horizon.html
http://www.rap-royalty.com/forum/tex...ep-masses.html

This feeling does anything but soothe and the mood stalks
Loneliness incurable by movies and group talks
For solutions I’m a blank board. Nothing to do with the new chalk
Life’s a dance battle and my only move is the moonwalk

My wall of defenses withers too soon.
Looking at the sky for God as it glitters….new moon.
Knowing sin isn’t cool fools try to win with loose rules.
As I’m staring down myself in this interview room.

We love to judge images of others not reflections
Resume’s presented, hopes for a good impression………are squashed
The lesson is that if I stop pretendin
Weaknesses show. Next mirror…not interested

I’m that abandoned lost ship in the sea
Ravaged by the kraken and ripped at the seams
Eaten alive by nature….the most vicious of teeth
Finishing me. Finally at my fingertips…peace


Low self esteem is a danger to the mind
Get in range and then it strikes in several stages til u die
It all starts from the horror and pain that’s in your eyes
U relied on ur acceptance….application is denied

[Swayde]

uppin this...........

[Logic 1]

Werd this was dope dude, u kept in consistent with everything (flow, topic, rhymescheme, metaphors ect.)

I liked the way u worded everything, made for a smoothe flow, as did ur good structure
The opening and closing paraphrases were my favorites which is good cause they should always be the strongest whether a battle/topical/or regular song.

Fav Line.
"For solutions I’m a blank board. Nothing to do with the new chalk. Life’s a dance battle and my only move is the moonwalk"

Keep writing yo,

[Swayde]

thnx man...want me to rtf in one of ur pieces gimme a link uppin this

[Silk Audio]

I've got to show love on this drop Swayde, your structure and wording made the flow velvet. Just the topic in itself was refreshing but it was the refreshing scheme and delivery that had me engaged. Like Logic stated above your opener and closer were definitely the cream of the piece but the rest was on a really nice level too. Keep doing what you do bruh.

[Swayde]

thnx alot yall........

[CHEEZE]

wow...i'm depress'd as fuck now...but good drop...i think its a snapshot piece that errybody can relate to their own life at some point...like the others said...flow and concept were conistant...it was poetic yet still had hiphop elements...very nice...can't deny you on this piece...

duece

[Velocity]

Over-all I've never checked a dull drop from You Swayde and that's mad respect upping to me. The consistency is what hooks me in. Only flaw I can see DIRECTLY in text is this

"As I’m staring down myself in this interview room."
Should be "As I'm staring down at myself"

Otherwise, the concept was well done and fairly original. Execution was good so the flow held fairly steady.

Over-all you got a nice way to touch on these things. Keep doing you.

-Velo-

[Swayde]

thnx yall

[cinderella]

yea nice wordplay and methapors/similies

even the flow was on point

butta

the content is buggers

pardon me, im drunk.