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Old 03-07-2013, 10:34 PM   #11
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oh okay,, i was posting them for u,,thanx man,,,will feed this by tomorrow
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Old 03-08-2013, 01:39 PM   #12
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I admired your vocabulary. Certainly felt the vibes, horrorcore feel to it. Didn't make sense of the bar transitions but i kind of got a point. I would suggest you use wordplay rather than being straightforward with it all. On these type of pieces you want to paint a picture. Good attempt buddy.
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