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08-11-2007, 11:43 PM
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|  Dear Summer, Cant deny that im missin-you prolly be pissed-N-Shrewed But im givin-truth So listen to tha letter i spit-to-you you'll prolly think im dissin-you But... Im givin all-my best to get-it-off-my chest,a letter from me-i dun care if it dun leave cats all-impressed/ BUT...Im done-tryin un-windin to let tha feelin sub-side i give all my feelingz wit no useage of a punch-line/ Tha weather wasnt alwayz sunny as you promised-itd-be....but you was givin otha dudes sunshine,and that was a problem-to-me/ Rainy dayz wasnt really stoppin-me...it opted-me to keep from actin sloppily...and fake like i didnt care...yea that probably/ Deep down...it was only to constitute-my-health couldnt compromise myself because i wantchu-to-myself.../ I guess thas not-too-clever...common sense shoulda got-thru-better...you were just a season...never could last-forever/ like past-endeavors...you were just a fad...-an adventure...sweetest drug you got me high but it was sad-pleasure/ But i wasnt alone,thas facts-for-me just a bad-story thunder claps-pouring rain...damn...cant wait for winter coming back-for-me/ ...but as i lay-in-tha-cold and try ta face-shit-alone...i'll alwayz remember those once bright days-that-are-gone../ but if spring comes around and ya search starts-for-me... ...give up you didnt have tha heart-for-me, JaY |
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08-11-2007, 11:46 PM
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| i gotta be honest..this is prolly the most well stated metaphor i seen. Damn man the concept alone was high in creativity and the way u worded taht shit was real poetic man. def had the emotion being felt and everything.
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08-12-2007, 03:45 AM
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| Damn killa..slow downn You killin em with this. phenomonal joint playa The concept was great, multies were tight MEtas and word placement was all ill FIre drop in my opinion.. Real Talk
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08-12-2007, 07:24 AM
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| Man... this was good. Multis really made this flow together nice. the content was on point... like past-endeavors...you were just a fad...-an adventure...sweetest drug you got me high but it was sad-pleasure/ I loved that line, because you didn't make it about her anymore, you touched on yourself... Excellant job with this Jay.
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08-14-2007, 02:20 PM
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| The Muscle Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: The Land Where The Fallen Angels Are Kept...
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| Damn, Just Caught This...Good Shit....10/10 Great Flow, Multi's Amazing.
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08-15-2007, 08:15 AM
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| I guess thas not-too-clever...common sense shoulda got-thru-better...you were just a season...never could last-forever/ like past-endeavors...you were just a fad...-an adventure...sweetest drug you got me high but it was sad-pleasure/ ^ Best Bar...Started Slow Got Better As It Progressed...Topic Metaphorically Speaking Was Coo...As The Actual Song No Real Mettaphors In There...Most Multies Were On Point...It'd Be Easy To Catch A Flow With a Differnt Sceme Or Without Those Lil Dashes...Overall a Decent Project Could Of Been Upped With a Little More COntent And a Few Solid Inside Metta's 8/10
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08-16-2007, 03:39 PM
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| So I Get The Feeling U Can Take Postive Watered Down Feed...But When Someone Gives Ya Constructive Criticism They Have no Idea What There Talking About?...U Had Barely ANy Metaphors In there...Do U Know What a Metaphor Is?...Ur Topic Ehhh I Guess Was a Metaphor But The COntent Lacked...Take It How Ya Want It...
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