[FIRE]War with Heaven.....

[streetsoldier16]

War with heaven, some shit might be spelled wrong n the """ might be like that cause on sixshot if you edit it makes those double up lol....anyways here....its a story type, read, the last line holds the most importance and the whole key really lol......



*tv comes on*, we want you.......

i was watchin the tube, bout to cop me some food/
Demons hand pulls me thru just stoppin me rude/
he said we want you, to help fight for hell in the war/
what war? we going to heaven to go settle the score/
my mind was there twistin n turnin sittin concerned n/
i could fight the light or stay in dark forever here burnin/
i said give me a minute, while i looked for the portal/
Lucifer laughed n said, we have "shooken this mortal/
i turned back n said, strap up im ready to fight bitch/
he gave me a celestial weapon n "steady the knife kid/

i looked at his face.....we went back n forth talkin.....n...

i said why me? he said cause your divine intelligence/
now do it for the hell of it, what if my minds benelovent/
"goods i''''ll be sellin it, now dont be such a feeble one"/
I''''ll take my staff n inject matter n create the evil son/
made a biological pool and said go n get in the vortex/
put a sword in my head n inscripted 666 in my cortex/
mind flex n i felt all the good feelings leave my presence/
Gav me ares battle words and told me to read the sentence/

Destruction its on, time to go up and abuse these cowards/
"I am the god of war and its time to for me to use my powers"/

i looked at his mouth n.......

A Sound wave flew out, n he was hummin the oddest names/
he yelled so loud that he had summoned the god wit flames/
up from broken chains, he risen thru lucifers spoken claim/
all the demons jumped up and ares was there soaked n fame/

he yelled .........

1000 years of me being closed in, im ready for gods oblivion/
he ordered lucifer 1000 men n a general n said "u give me them/
he pointed to me, and said i want you by my side in this war/
u shall ride victorious on my chariot as we ride thru the gore/
i said no, at haste ran at him as i had carried these knives/
sliced his arms legs n eyes then went and had ate ares alive/
i felt his power.........
a hot wet aura, hit me from those dead see docks of gomorrah/
Body fillin with all the evil unleashed from the box of pandora/
lucifer said
im impressed, now are you ready to go n controll the cosmos/
take stars, burn torahs n anything that ya hold what god wrote/

yes father..........*we then marched, i started a chant*.......

The demons go marching one by one, hurrah, hurrah
The demons go marching one by one, hurrah, hurrah
The demons go marching one by one,
The demons unleashed lucifers son
And they all go marching up to the skiiesss.........

The demons go marching one by one, hurrah, hurrah
The demons go marching one by one, hurrah, hurrah
The demons go marching one by one,
The demons unleashed lucifers son
And they all go marching up to the skiiesss.........

years later...........we are there....so with an.....

omnious walk n crawl to the gates, we brawl to our fates/
And Rip the angels wings n watch them fall to there face/
now there dyin, i see gabriel over there in the corner cryin/
so i grab n throw him light speed and watch em go flyin/
now the backs of foes split, hell cyanide got them chokin/
i go and disintegrate the commandements followed by moses/
killed jesus'''' mother when i leave her there stopped with a parry/
reach and grab that judas and hang em over the body of mary/
jesus cant believe thus has betrayed thy lord who died for me/
i point at him and say im bout to leave heaven n the sky debris/

i go to jesus n........
fire expelld ruthless from lips, he will lose from fire and sins/
i''''ve double crossed my savior, when i had cruzifyed him again/
i then seen god say STOP and then i had felt hell n time freeze/
we lost the war, when i felt the burnin passion of my rhyme sieze/

[streetsoldier16]

^^^

[AzN_oPtImUz33]

concept was def different.....this was mad creative though...your thoughts seem a lil dark on this devil tip....lol...stay up though...Peace

[PredictableProphet]

this was very creative, the concept is orginal, well thought out and written well.

Multis were present, but no obvious, flow was very well done. vocab was there, but not an overbearing factor.

Very nice.

[streetsoldier16]

thnx my nig...

[streetsoldier16]

hehe

[Chosen]

Street Soldier wut up fam... nice to see you back.... yea I know you prolly dont remeber me.. but anyways

First and Foremost I would like to ask you.... "Are you a demon?"

na but on some real shit this was sick you remind me of Cassket for Fearless Warriors... yea I was on there too.....

Shit was evil and mad creative homie.... I been tryin to open up tha
"Dark Side" of my "Force" na mean

9/10 keep this shit up

once again nice to see you back

[Faze]

hahahaha, my homie be droppin that demonic type of shit man, cant even fuck wit that its all crazy kids, 10/10

[Dispution]

Pretty good... creative, definitely unique and original. Good story telling, good structuring, some spelling errors as you pointed out there would be... but other than that everything else was on point. Definitely one of the better keys I've read.

[streetsoldier16]

thnx cuzzo, how u doin fam?^^^