Determity vs 3d

[3d-]

Due Saturday by 11:59 PM
5 bars = 10 lines
No stretching
No feeding
No biting
No bitching
No shitheads
No dicksucking

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[3d-]

http://www.rap-royalty.com/forum/tex...l-topical.html

You ready to get messed up? keep the italicize, capitalization and bold to a minimum, your a rapper not a stylist, this isn't dress up

Rap kid? Get tore in the back an! Your wordplay? Poor with the action/
So like chemical equilibrium, your punches product? No more reaction!//(once at equilibrium theres no reaction)
This war keeps lasting, and your army is less than large/
D could be a gymnast the way he’s stretched in bars!//(stretching bars..he does a lot)
Catch a beating and take the lesson far, You kind of fail, fake/
No wonder your never winning, your rhymes are stale, mate!//(chess?)
In my prime, time to hail greats, speak the mind, my knowledge fluent/
And writing this I’m a head(ahead) of ‘Term’ like college students!//(ahead of deTERMity)
Your homage ruined! Get a ‘free punch,’ I’m hitting nice and placid/
And the only time D talks sick(toxic) is when he’s spitting nitric acid!//(well thats easy to get)

If you don't get something try to ask before voting

[DeTeRMiTY]

http://www.rap-royalty.com/forum/tex...-0-0-text.html


Lol this almost turned into a topical - but an important and relevant one none-the-less .

Solid Spit d - much respect......aight here goes.....

i aint no "cave-man" , gotta "dress up" for a rave man !



whats with "d's" holes in perception? - is he a "fiend" of false direction?
he will never reach ascension if he fuckin deems in three dimensions !

"3" needs an interjection! - creep's gotta focus and pay attention !
regardless - he's never "turned on" - except when he's provoked by gay erections !

no pretension - see "d's" descent into Dementia...
i'll re-invent this semantic-spastic- with-"deep dyslexia"

so what be vexin huh ? my genial flaw-detector correctin ya ?
u "menial matter -lacker" wit cerebral cortex-anorexia !

state of delirium - your "dysfunction's "systematic"
u suffer - serious ? or was u BORN ANENCEPHALIC !

EXPO:

BAR 1: Basically saying that he wont make it anywhere on this site if he deems (thinks) in 3 dimensions - i.e ...thinks like a "brick" ( 3 dimensional object)

BAR 2: "interjection" - utterence of an exclamation

BAR 3:"semantic" - word meanings "deep dyslexia" - a form of aquired dyslexia which mainly impairs reading skills

BAR 4:"genial" - characterized by "genius" . "menial" - as in "lowly"
"cerebral cortex" - its key role is perceptual awareness

BAR 5 : "systematic" - 3 d has systematically given me "controversial" votes - in my eyes anyway...
"Anencephalic" - born without the top of the head and all or major parts of the brain.

plz ask for futher explanations - or dont vote.

[Tommy Kost]

Punches: 3d
Complexity: Determity
Multies: Determity
Metas: 3d
Entertainment: 3d
Creativity: Tie
Personals: Tie
Structure: Tie
Flow: 3d
Closer: Tie

Vote: 3d

I can do a bar-by-bar breakdown if needed, but I think this battle speaks for itself. As far as punchlines go, I thought 3d had the more hard hitting lines. Determity had a nice vocabulary and a cool flow but his punches didn't hit as hard as 3d's.

Best bars:
3d:
In my prime, time to hail greats, speak the mind, my knowledge fluent,
And writing this I’m a head(ahead) of ‘Term’ like college students!
Determity:
"3" needs an interjection! - creep's gotta focus and pay attention !
regardless - he's never "turned on" - except when he's provoked by gay erections !

I felt like Determity's vocabulary got in the way of his actual punchlines. I understood the lines without having to read the explainations but the similies weren't there for me. He had 1 or 2 decent punchlines and the rest was just fillers, flow, and vocabulary.

Good battle, close. Hope to see a rematch in the future.

[BiZarRE]

Punches: 3d
Complexity: Tie
Multies: D
Metas: 3d
Entertainment: 3d
Creativity: D
Personals: Tie
Structure: 3d
Flow: 3d
Closer: Tie

Vote: 3d

3d won this in my opinion, not much else to say.

[insane b]

Punches: D
Complexity: D
Multies: 3D
Metas: 3D
Entertainment: D
Creativity: D
Personals: D
Structure: 3D
Flow: D
Closer: D

Vote: D wins

[Nietzsche]

I think his vote was for Determity

Rap kid? Get tore in the back an! Your wordplay? Poor with the action/
So like chemical equilibrium, your punches product? No more reaction!//(once at equilibrium theres no reaction)

This was worded wierd. The punch's sting lacked because of that. Work on the concepts, good your thinking outside of the box. Keep working on that.

This war keeps lasting, and your army is less than large/
D could be a gymnast the way he’s stretched in bars!//(stretching bars..he does a lot)

Getting better here, working in personals. Wasn't a bad punch, was good to see it. Keep it up.

Catch a beating and take the lesson far, You kind of fail, fake/
No wonder your never winning, your rhymes are stale, mate!//(chess?)

Try not to force the flow in the first bar, wasn't bad though, maybe worked the chess concept more. But not a bad punch.

In my prime, time to hail greats, speak the mind, my knowledge fluent/
And writing this I’m a head(ahead) of ‘Term’ like college students!//(ahead of deTERMity)

The wordplay ending I thought could have been just a little better. But better definitely. Keep it up

Your homage ruined! Get a ‘free punch,’ I’m hitting nice and placid/
And the only time D talks sick(toxic) is when he’s spitting nitric acid!//(well thats easy to get)

Getting better with the wordplay, this one gets used a lot but not bad at all. Not bad though.

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whats with "d's" holes in perception? - is he a "fiend" of false direction?
he will never reach ascension if he fuckin deems in three dimensions !

Wasn't feeling this bar. Trying too hard to make it flow, work on the punches rather than the flow.

"3" needs an interjection! - creep's gotta focus and pay attention !
regardless - he's never "turned on" - except when he's provoked by gay erections !

Played, work on the creativity and concepts. You'll get there just takes time.

no pretension - see "d's" descent into Dementia...
i'll re-invent this semantic-spastic- with-"deep dyslexia"

No Punch.

so what be vexin huh ? my genial flaw-detector correctin ya ?
u "menial matter -lacker" wit cerebral cortex-anorexia !

Wasn't feeling this.

state of delirium - your "dysfunction's "systematic"
u suffer - serious ? or was u BORN ANENCEPHALIC !

Wasn't feeling this one either.

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Punches: 3d, def. improvement. Determity, work on the concepts and you'll get there in no time.
Complexity: 3d
Multies: Determity
Metas: 3d
Entertainment: 3d
Creativity: 3d
Personals: No
Structure: Tie
Flow: Determity
Closer: 3d

Vote - 3d, 3-1.

[Verbal_Assault]

Punches: 3d
Complexity: tie
Multies: Determity
Metas: 3d
Entertainment: 3d
Creativity: 3d
Personals: 3d
Structure: Determity
Flow: Determity
Closer: 3d

Vote-3d

[The Genius]

Punches: 3d
Complexity: determity
Multies: determity
Metas: 3d
Entertainment: 3d
Creativity: 3d
Personals: None
Structure: Tie
Flow: Determity
Closer: 3d

Both yal steppin your game up, but 3d had the punches that hit more so than determity in this battle.

vote: 3d

[Nietzsche]

3d Defeats Determity, 5-1.