DETERmity Vs. Johnny Greaseball (Round 1 of Topical Tournament)

[Nietzsche]

Topic: Faith
Line Limit: 20

Please Use This To Vote

Creativity--
Entertainment--
Flow--
Rhyme Scheme--
Consistency/Topic--
Lit. Elements--
Vocabulary--
Emotion--

Due - Sunday, 11:59 PM Central Time Zone

[DeTeRMiTY]

Chek

http://www.rap-royalty.com/forum/vot...kraft-won.html


well .......i wasn't too keen on the idea of this topic , so i had no idea how to approach it , wasnt even gonna bother at atall , but it would be be stupid not to at least have a go , hell this guy mite even no -show anyway.

well heres what i came up with - in the last dying minutes b4 i go to work.........



my faith is engaged - encased beyond the waves of my brain
into the fray - i raise faith to be on top of my game
the topic is lame - but i have faith in the philosophy stage - indoctrinate ways-
to keep - faith - let my psychology reign
neurology fades - like faith is just another "part of me"
its hard to - see - faith - when its corrupt and under "dark -history"
in "charge" of the scene - i prove - faith -is a "marker" for me - ive "tarnished" my dreams-
with the faith - blessed on a harmony - breeze
im "learning to breathe" - cos faith is but a "version" of me -i burden the beast
that lurks - faith in a diversional scheme
in the "excursion" it seems.....that faith is just a "virginal being"
with a permanent plead - for us to bleed faith and "immerse" in the freedom

dont have time for expo's .....
if u "get it" - u get it.......
if u dont - then PLZ dont vote.. thanks

[$*Johnny Greaseball*$]

haaa



PLEASEEE


Faith is like a crutch for your crippled ass minds,
Simple wack rhymes,
Faith is scoliosis and a brittle cracked spine..

I read my bible nine times, I never really get to finish,
Faith is lost interest in a book without a picture in it.
Look around the shit we live in, held in and captive,
Faith used to be free until Mel Gibson taxed it.

Checks and blanks, metaphorically I’m testing faith,
Cuz I get the rent I pay - straight from the collection plate.
Demonstrate, a style so impeccable,
Faith in dank weed to put a fire up the devil’s nose.
Save the blank pages for my medical, hell is old…

Faith is like a ladder, kind of, in a way…
And I aint ashamed to say that I’d climb up it some day.

http://www.rap-royalty.com/forum/vot...tml#post297378

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[Nietzsche]

Creativity-- Johnny, Determity I think you kind of got stuck on faith, and could have branched out a little more. Verse wasn't bad at all actually, just felt like Johnny took the topic somewhere else.
Entertainment-- Johnny, it was close, I did enjoy some of Determity's lines but the way Johnny closed it, was interesting and got my vote.
Flow-- Determity
Rhyme Scheme-- Tie
Consistency/Topic-- Determity
Lit. Elements-- Johnny Greaseball
Vocabulary-- Determity
Emotion-- Johnny Greaseball

Vote - Johnny Greaseball, 1-0.

Just felt like he put more behind the verse, not bad from either though. Def a good battle, keep it up.

[BiZarRE]

Creativity-- J
Entertainment-- Tie
Flow-- Tie
Rhyme Scheme-- D
Consistency/Topic-- D
Lit. Elements-- J
Vocabulary-- Tie
Emotion-- J

Vote - Johnny

[Dragon]

Personally I think y'all sleepin....

Creativity-- Deter
Entertainment-- Deter (Greasballs was boring)
Flow-- Deter, flowed together QUITE well
Rhyme Scheme-- Was Feeling Determity's
Consistency/Topic-- Tie
Lit. Elements-- Determity
Vocabulary-- Determity Duh.
Emotion-- Determity


Vote: Determity

[Verbal_Assault]

Originally Posted by Dragon

Personally I think y'all sleepin....

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Creativity-- Det(no contest)
Entertainment-- Det
Flow-- Det, (greasy was shaky at times)
Rhyme Scheme-- tie
Consistency/Topic-- tie
Lit. Elements-- Determity
Vocabulary-- Det(easy)
Emotion-- Det

vote-Det

[P H A X]

Hmm. Very interesting topic, and verses. I think Determity wasn't too clear with what he was trying to do. "The topic is lame" I kinda lost interest after that statement alone, Maybe this topic didn't interest you enough, but I felt like you were missing alot. Johnny did pretty good with what he had, Like the Mel Gibson line. I thought you were a little more creative with this particular topic, everything was pretty much on point, and consistent. Your closer was FTW, But I honestly have Johnny taking this one, not by a landslide or anything, but I think he was the clear winner here.


MVGT- Johnny Grease Lightning

[Ill Vibe]

Creativity-- Johnny
Entertainment-- Tie
Flow-- Tie
Rhyme Scheme-- Johnny
Consistency/Topic-- Johnny
Lit. Elements-- Det
Vocabulary-- Det
Emotion-- Johnny

Like Kraft said Determity wasn't very clear with his verse. Had a lot of nice sounding words that didn't actually make sense. Johnny was clear, to the point, kinda basic but good shit.

Vote - Johnny

[Kardiac]

i think det kinda lost his way he said he wasnt feeling the topic that much any way so maybe that was it idk but i think johnny came across alot clearer. there was times in det verse where he just seemed to be rambling on yea the flow was good he used some different words that may have caught others attention but all in all this is a topical and i think johnny was more consistent so mvgt.................


johnny