Drewish Vs Hyzzy Vs Joey Gladstone (Topical Joey)

[Drewishhh]

Topical...
Topic: Dying Slowly
Due: A week because I've got GCSEs but I'mma try get it done this weekend.
Length: Write as much as you want to get the point across.

Checkers

[Joey Gladstone]

just saw this now... checkster

i say 5 to 10 bars would be good enough

[Hyzzy]

http://www.rap-royalty.com/forum/tex...-vs-beast.html

there's my vote link...will get at this by tomorrow...

[Joey Gladstone]

True Story...

He was a friend of my sisters and then we became pretty cool/
a city dude moved to CT n went to the same middle school//1
as a little dude playing soccer he got kicked hard right under his stomache/
by some dumb kid but didn't think nothing of it//2
something was wrong with him but no visible answer/
until after high school doctors noticed he was living with testicular cancer//3
he was in shock wen he found out he only had six months to live/
so all he did was lit blunts and drink//4
stopped the medication n started balding fast/
quit his job n quickly spent all his cash//5
so it'll be a tragic lost we get, if only he found out before it was too late/
families unfortunate... couldn't see the world, so there was no need for a suitcase//6
its crazy only at the age of twenty n he knew his fate was coming/
imagine knowing that date was coming how would u react? how would ur brain just function?//7
thinking would i last today or past away thats the thoughts that were running right through/
i would rather get stuck with the flu... where would you go? what would you do?//8
knowing it was his time to go basically your DYING SLOW/
so as soon as his eyes get closed your bodys deceased but i know ur spirit is rising bro//9

R.I.P Juan

[Drewishhh]

“I know we’re all dying in the Tibetan sense of the word”



Just to think I’ve been waiting for this moment for years...
I try to block out the pain but I’m hopeless with fear...
And by these people surrounding me toasting the air...
They make me feel it’s over and I’m so fucking scared...

On what occurred after the final moment I’ve not pondered...
Or even wondered all I knew was that my beats were numbered...
But they would have to stop my soul would be summoned...
Whether to paradise, or not, there’d be no running...

As I approach Death and while I’m at it not stereotypical death...
With the hood, the sickle and the skull with the terrible breath...

He tells me....

“We will all die son, it’s only a matter of time...”
“You should be grateful all the while during your life...”

And with these clever words with my erected nerves...
I asked him scared, if it ever hurts...
And he said “no more than life son, now walk up the stairs...”
“And be blessed, you can test if the rest is words...” (Biblical)

Just wrote this up quick before I go to school.

GL people!

[Hyzzy]

my turn

The light's glimmer shimmers, tainted by my image in the mirror
I've become the exact antonym to the definition of a winner
No life to live...lost my wife and kids to some guy that's rich
and dont try the fridge...it's empty mom comin by each night to bitch
Preceeding both my reputation and expectations
If i represent famous u know why celebs get facelifts
One bad night causin a landslide...my babies watchin mom and dad fight
I promised not to hit her..she got on my bad side, damn...cried
I'd kick myself out but i'm already in a big sty
So left while I tried to pick up to pieces of my life
Bleeding from the soul...a vacuum to the light
in a constant fight...to even wanna stay alive

[Illustrious]

this was tough to grade , i liked all three verses actually and how the three verses were unique and presented something different

Creativity-- tie
Entertainment-- tie . . . can't really pick one i enjoy all of them
Flow-- drew
Rhyme Scheme--gladstone
Consistency/Topic-- tie
Lit. Elements-- hyzzy
Vocabulary-- drew
Emotion--gladstone
joey
families unfortunate... couldn't see the world, so there was no need for a suitcase//6
its crazy only at the age of twenty n he knew his fate was coming/
imagine knowing that date was coming how would u react? how would ur brain just function?//7
thinking would i last today or past away thats the thoughts that were running right through/

so as soon as his eyes get closed your bodys deceased but i know ur spirit is rising bro//9


drew
Just to think I’ve been waiting for this moment for years...
I try to block out the pain but I’m hopeless with fear...
And by these people surrounding me toasting the air...

As I approach Death and while I’m at it not stereotypical death...
With the hood, the sickle and the skull with the terrible breath...

And with these clever words with my erected nerves...
I asked him scared, if it ever hurts...
And he said “no more than life son, now walk up the stairs...”

hyzzy
The light's glimmer shimmers, tainted by my image in the mirror
I've become the exact antonym to the definition of a winner

If i represent famous u know why celebs get facelifts

Bleeding from the soul...a vacuum to the light
in a constant fight...to even wanna stay alive

those were my favorite lines . . . i didn't like the flowing of joey's story but i thought he wrote a pretty good story . i liked drew's verse for how he worded it and put it together . i didn't think hyzzy put forth his best effort . my vote would go to drew though , i was drawn into his story more and liked it slightly better than joey's , i don't know it's hard to pick one but drew's is the one i kept coming back to

vote: drewishhh

[beej]

I've never voted on a topic to be honst, but I'll toss one out there.

1. Creativity - Drewish
2. Entertainment - Tie
3. Flow - Hyzzy
4. Rhyme Scheme - I'm gonna have to disagree with Illustrious on this one, I didn't like Joey's at all to be honest. Needed some work in my (amateur) opinion. Gonna go with Hyzzy for this one.
5. Consistency/Topic - Tie.
6. Lit. Elements - Hyzzy
7. Vocabulary - Tie.
8. Emotion -Joey.

I liked this battle a lot. Wasn't overly crazy at the topic at first, but whatever. I think it turned out well with solid verses from all contestants. My end vote has to go to Hyzzy, though.

[Ego]

Creativity-- Hyzzy
Entertainment-- Joey
Flow-- Joey/Drew
Rhyme Scheme--Drew
Consistency/Topic--All
Lit. Elements-- Joey
Vocabulary-- Hyzzy
Emotion--Joey

Pretty good topical battle. I think every one got the topic down & wrote some good shit, the verse I felt shined the most was Joeys though. I liked the concept Drew went w/ but felt it was a little played. Hyzzy was the odd man out, didnt really get into his verse as much. Between Drew & Joey, Joey told a better story I thought & that is where my vote goes. But good shit from every one, seems like its goin to be split

Vote: Joey

[Nietzsche]

Everybody brought something, I thought this was a good battle, think everybody had an idea behind it and put forth the time to do it.

Creativity-- Tie
Entertainment-- Joey
Flow-- Drew
Rhyme Scheme--Drew
Consistency/Topic-- Drew/Joey
Lit. Elements-- Joey
Vocabulary-- Hyzzy
Emotion--Joey

Vote - Joey Gladstone

Great battle, everybody brought their shit, I think every person took it to a personal place whether that be themselves or something they've seen/been affected by which is cool, so this turned out hard to vote. More battles like this and a topical tourney/belt will be needed. Keep it up.