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02-08-2010, 05:13 PM
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| ~The Perfect Storm~  Join Date: Feb 2010 Location: Washington, DC Aka Chocolate City
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|  Ya Know Yo This A Quick Lil Joint I Put Together For All You Lyrical Heads $cumbag - On Your Own Instrumental*Wavy*Mars Monarch
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02-08-2010, 07:49 PM
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| Street Soldier Join Date: Dec 2007
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|  u sound mad different on this track almost didnt recognize u lol beat is alright pretty basic like the fast delivery, the beginnin vocab is dope, nice flow too haha "make u close ur eyes like an orgasm" funny only thing i really do is turn up the vocals to me it sounded low but i know from ur other track that wasnt a problem, so im wonderin if thats me or if its becuz its still a rough draft? anyway cool track, really was diggin the flow and fast spittin had a nice switch up half way that i thought was cool u did ur thing |
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02-08-2010, 10:43 PM
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| ~The Perfect Storm~ Join Date: Feb 2010 Location: Washington, DC Aka Chocolate City
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| LoL Thanks Man. Like I Said On The Other Track It Came From The Heart, This Joint Was Basicly Coming From The Brain If You Know What I Mean So Far Turn Up The Vocals... Check
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02-08-2010, 10:54 PM
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| A Marked Man  Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Kansas City
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| Flow was dope. Lyrics were good, again with the good punchlines, good shit. It was short, quick and too the point. Kind of like you said it would be. Kept it clean, quality was cool, and all and all came out with another good track. Like to hear what you have, not putting out the same flow after every track, I can respect that. Keep it going, looking forward to more. As far as making it better, I too did hear it a little low, nothing too noticeable though, maybe the hook is what I'd keep up and broaden but I like it too how it is. |
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02-09-2010, 05:48 PM
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| Stay Greasy  Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: Riverside, CA
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| I like it a lot. You're flow and delivery is very good... that "Ya know" stuff isn't too hot...at the end it's mixed weird or something. You also had a constant hiss that you can easily cut out of there... Quality's alright, you work with what you have, but you left things in there that could easily be cleaned out. Anyway, I like your flow and delivery..this is a dope little track, kinda wish it had 2 more verses tho
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02-09-2010, 10:28 PM
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| Untouchable Join Date: Mar 2007
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| Listening, the only thing that jumps out to me, is the vocals could be upped some. Other than that, your shit is on point it sounds like. But remembering it's a rough draft, I'm sure you've thought of that, and will have it fixed. Different approach from your other track, delivery different, like the switch up, flow is solid, good vocab, lyrics are tight. Beat was nice also, liked that. You got a good voice for this and you're consistent, keep at it, would be a shame to stop short. Look forward to hearing the final version, and more of your tracks, keep it up
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